Client Testimonials

Kind words from a few of my friends . . .


Thank you so much for your honesty and ideas. I agree with everything you mentioned in your critique. God bless, Bill. I am so glad I found you in the vast sea of options. If I have any questions or need further insight, I will email. Merry Christmas, Bill. You have certainly given me the best present I could get this year!

Donalie Beltran
Author of Murder Is a Family Affair

Just got back from Jacksonville yesterday and had a chance to read everything. WOW! You did a great job of taking the rough edges off the manuscript and smoothing it out. Thank you so much. It is a much better read now. I started making notes of the places you clarified/rearranged wording, but there were so many I finally gave up. Be assured, though, I studied them carefully and learned from each one.

Pam Bingemann
Author of Common Justice

I was overwhelmed by the thoroughness of your critique. I had no idea what to expect. It was much more than I thought it would be. I was so excited to get started on the rewrite. The help and guidance you offered during the rewrite was invaluable. I can’t think of anything else you could have done to help in the final editing and proofing process. Maybe the best I can say is that you were a joy to work with. I look forward to you taking a look at my next manuscript.

Art Bollinger
Author of Cutler’s Pride

Thank you again for the work you’ve done. The book is so clean now I’m jealous I couldn’t get it up to that level myself.

Joseph Britt
Author of A Kids’ Matinee

I must say a special thank-you for solving my three years of editing issues and problems. The manuscript looks great. I am very happy I took a chance on you. It was totally worth it. You have elevated my book, The Non-Silence of the Lamb, to another level. For that I am thankful.

Dr. Luke Brown
Author of The Non-Silence of the Lamb

Once again, your evaluation was terrific and will be invaluable in my repair of the manuscript. I believe The Last Rapier has commercial potential, but as I said earlier, I knew something wasn’t right about it. You have helped me see what those weaknesses are, and I can fix them. Thank you.

David Bullock
Author of The Last Rapier

I just wanted to thank you again for the terrific job you did on my evaluation. I went over the manuscript with a much finer eye (yours, actually) and made the appropriate edits. They have made a good manuscript great, and I have you to thank for it. Thank you so much for giving me that push to take it to another level. I really appreciate it.

David Cassidy
Author of Gateway

Invaluable info. Have to dissect it all now. Everything you said resonates strongly. I’m all over it. Thank you so much.

Landa Coldiron
Author of The Bloodhound Handler

Thank you for your thorough evaluation! And thank you for the encouragement! Every one of your suggestions on improving my novel rings true. I’d never be able to see all these myself. I’m too close to the writing, plus I don’t have the skill set that you do of knowing exactly what’s called for in a contemporary suspense story. I’ll go back and fix the mechanical problems you’ve detailed. I’ll also clean up the portions with unclear viewpoints. And I’ll further develop Mike’s history and motivation. It’s Ted’s character that’s going to take a truckload of work. After reading your observations, I now see that I need to change him from a carefree house cat into a spirited tiger.

Warren Cook
Author of Showtime

Any success I’ve had in the rewrite is due directly to your plot analysis, coaching, suggestions, and teaching this novice writer. I confess, at first I had a hard time accepting, and then absorbing, your critical comments. I didn’t want to waste all that research and storyline. But gradually as I began to rethink the project and then to employ your suggestions, it all began to make sense and I liked the story a lot more. I especially like the new scenes involving Masterson and his adventures.

Al Dawson
Author of Finding Noriko

First let me say thanks so much. It’s a bit frustrating to me that others use me to “edit” their stories sometimes, and although far from a professional like you, I’m generally well received when I do it. Except, of course, when I’m trying to review my own work and fail miserably. It’s like I know it too well and look right through the writing to the story underlying. So again, thanks so much for picking up the grammar and tense and paragraph placement and all of the other fun stuff that comes with a DeFazio “masterpiece.”

Christopher DeFazio
Author of Last Chance

The advice you gave me during and after the critique of my novel, Touched, has come full circle. You suggested narrowing it to a single viewpoint, simplifying its content, and shortening it to a middle-grade novel. Well, after reworking it several times trying to get it the way I wanted it, I’ve seen the light. I am working on a single-viewpoint version right now that I foresee being about 45,000 to 50,000 words. The language is greatly simplified, and is only from Nat’s viewpoint. I did get some helpful advice from the local writer’s group in my hometown, but nothing that propelled me forward like the information from you. Every day I put words into my story, I am seeing the wisdom in the pages from your critique, and I get closer to a better story.

Daniel Dunday
Author of Touched

Thank you for your excellent critique, which is far beyond my expectations, on schedule, and very, very much appreciated!!! It will take a while to digest it all, and I know already that I can learn a lot from it!

Johannes H. Egbers
Author of The Progressionists

Thank you for your spot-on critique. The overall manuscript improvements that came from it were astounding.

Robert Feeney
Author of Ark II

Thank you very much for these insights. As I mentioned on the phone, I was particularly impressed by the way you spotted each point in succession that I would have put in a list to ask you about – but of course didn’t in order to give you an unfettered approach to the story. The fact that in our discussion you touched on each question I had before I asked the question made this exercise even more helpful than I thought I should be able to expect. Now with this helpful and insightful list of how I can improve the manuscript, I have a path to follow on my next draft.

Ron Felt
Author of Just a Song Before I Go

I wanted to tell you how much I appreciate your work. I’m going through this and see that once again, your work is exactly what I had been looking for the day I searched for a professional copy editor. It brings me a lot of satisfaction to see my manuscript getting pounded into proper condition because of your expertise.

Ron Felt
Author of Just a Song Before I Go

I’ve read the critique and thank you for the thorough review. This is exactly what I need! I can’t wait to dive in and get to work.

Lynne Freeman
Author of Masqued

You did a fantastic job of editing my novel. LOVE IT! It really reads so much better, and I especially like the way you used more active voicing and improved much of the dialogue and action sequence wording. All without changing my basic style, structure, and patterns, etc. This professionally edited version was a real joy for me to read.

I also totally appreciated the way you interacted with me throughout the entire process, from initial manuscript evaluation through manuscript development thru pro-editing thru agent-list prep and pub-package development. You always delivered exactly what you promised on time, and answered all my belabored questions very patiently and thoroughly. It’s been a truly wonderful mentoring/coaching experience for me, just as I think it would be for anyone else attempting a first-time novel, especially one of this length! By the time it was all over, I felt like I’d completed a full-fledged graduate program at a top university in historical novel writing!

Bruce Gardner
Author of Hope of Ages Past

Bill, being a first-time author, I was wary of shopping for a good editor. You’ve exceeded my expectations in every way, and I’m amazed at how much you’ve enhanced the flow, development, and clarity of my manuscript. The majority of readers who have read my novel even remark on how well written it is, thanks to you. How you managed to tie everything in together so that the story makes more sense is astounding to me. You’re like a literary sharpshooter! Most of all, the education I received from you is invaluable and worth every penny. But you’re not just an editor; you’re also an amazingly effective teacher, and I consider you a “personal trainer” for authors. You really held my hand through the whole process, motivating me and essentially teaching me the art of writing fiction. It has been a fantastic journey for me. The effective way in which you apply and tailor your teaching to the writer’s manuscript is genius! And the extensive feedback you provided at every avenue was always pertinent and to the point, helping me to learn from my mistakes. Now I’m confident that every new book I write will be better than the last. I feel incredibly fortunate to have had the opportunity to work with you on my first novel. I could never thank you enough!

Jeff Geraci
Author of Paramnesia – Book One of the Royal Light Series

I appreciate such a great analysis. It’s like I am taking a creative writing class.

Mike Grabois
Author of The Same People

Thank you for the honest evaluation of The Trout River Project. In fact, you provided more than I expected. I am encouraged to use your comments as a guideline for rewriting Trout River.

David Grinstead
Author of The Trout River Project

Thank you from the bottom of my heart for such a wonderful evaluation. It will challenge me to be a better writer. As you pointed out, I need more dialog and action in my story so it doesn’t slow things down. I needed guidance in how to put these things into context. You did that for me. I do respect good criticism and learn from it. I intend to use your suggestions and comments as I do a restructure of this novel. There are so many things you wrote to help my book and me. I assure you that I am grateful for each one.

Joyce Halvorsen
Author of Winds of the Prairie

Wow! Thank you so much for your great evaluation. It was really strange to have someone communicate in such a precise manner. I cannot argue with anything you said in terms of making the story work for the largest audience possible. It was worth every penny!

Mark Holbrook
Author of Opposite Reaction

Thank you so much, Bill. I found a wealth of information in your evaluation, and it was exactly what I needed. Your review was thorough and wide-ranging, covering high-level analysis (such as storyline), mid-level (such as perspective shifts and narration), and even some low-level feedback (down to grammar and writing style). I have to say that I was truly impressed with what you provided, and I cannot say that it lacked for anything.

R. Christopher Kobb
Author of Fyrelocke: Jack Boomershine and the Prophecy Untold

Wow, this is the most amazingly helpful evaluation (or input of any kind) I’ve ever had as a writer. I can’t quite express how thankful I am to have found your help. Your thoughts are so insightful. Every point you make has the clearest ring of truth. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.

M. Talmage Moorehead, MD
Author of Cipher of the Nephilim

I am in awe of the miracle you have performed on my novel. I could not wait to tell you how pleased I am. You are the best. Thank you.

Dennis L. Morrow
Author of Alliance of the Quad

You are my third editor, and I cannot help thinking if only I had found you back when. Most important to me, you understand what I am trying to do. Your critique is insightful, and I am grateful for your help.

Brogan Joe Murphy
Author of Pentimento Hearts

Thank you so much for all of your work on this project. I can tell you spent a lot of time with my novel, and I greatly appreciate it. Your comments were thoughtful and detailed. They will give me a solid foundation to start from with this next rewrite. I will most certainly take you up on the offer to send it back for an additional review once I have finished reworking the character and plot issues.

Andrea Perno
Author of The Last Drop

Thank you for your professional evaluation of The Honors Jacket. I appreciate every word you have written. As I read through your evaluation, I saw suggestions and guidance coming from not only a professional editor but a longtime and trusted friend as well. Thank you.

Joe Spiller
Author of The Honors Jacket

Bill Greenleaf is a consummate professional at his craft. He gives new meaning to meticulous when it comes to grammatical and syntactical correctness. Better yet, Bill’s many improvements to my latest book, How Now, Norm’s Tao, were not only insightful, but were consistent with my offbeat sense of humor and irreverent literary style. If you want your book to be the very best it can be, give Bill Greenleaf a call today.

Norm Spitzig
Author of How Now, Norm’s Tao

Bill, thank you so much for your editorial evaluation! That was exactly what I was looking for. I appreciated the specific points that you mentioned, about the central conflict, nailing down the viewpoint, and developing a stronger introduction to my protagonist. As I was writing the novel, I felt that the thriller angle was weak and lacking in urgency. I like the idea of making it a gentle read, as that seems to be the strength of what has been written so far.

Taylor Stonely
Author of The Fallen Body

Though I am speechless, I manage to find one word to describe your work:

PERFECT !!!!!!

I’ll forever be grateful. Thank you.

Sabine Sydney
Author of Stolen

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