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I just wanted to thank you again for the terrific job you did on my evaluation. I went over the manuscript with a much finer eye (yours, actually) and made the appropriate edits. They have made a good manuscript great, and I have you to thank for it. Thank you so much for giving me that push to take it to another level. I really appreciate it.

You did a fantastic job of editing my novel. LOVE IT! It really reads so much better, and I especially like the way you used more active voicing and improved much of the dialogue and action sequence wording. All without changing my basic style, structure, and patterns, etc. This professionally edited version was a real joy for me to read. I also totally appreciated the way you interacted with me throughout the entire process, from initial manuscript evaluation through manuscript development thru pro-editing thru agent-list prep and pub-package development. You always delivered exactly what you promised on time, and answered all my belabored questions very patiently and thoroughly. It’s been a truly wonderful mentoring/coaching experience for me, just as I think it would be for anyone else attempting a first-time novel, especially one of this length! By the time it was all over, I felt like I’d completed a full-fledged graduate program at a top university in historical novel writing!

Thank you so much for your honesty and ideas. I agree with everything you mentioned in your critique. God bless, Bill. I am so glad I found you in the vast sea of options. If I have any questions or need further insight, I will email. Merry Christmas, Bill. You have certainly given me the best present I could get this year!

Bill, thank you so much for your editorial evaluation! That was exactly what I was looking for. I appreciated the specific points that you mentioned, about the central conflict, nailing down the viewpoint, and developing a stronger introduction to my protagonist. As I was writing the novel, I felt that the thriller angle was weak and lacking in urgency. I like the idea of making it a gentle read, as that seems to be the strength of what has been written so far.

Once again, your evaluation was terrific and will be invaluable in my repair of the manuscript. I believe The Last Rapier has commercial potential, but as I said earlier, I knew something wasn’t right about it. You have helped me see what those weaknesses are, and I can fix them. Thank you.

First let me say thanks so much. It’s a bit frustrating to me that others use me to “edit” their stories sometimes, and although far from a professional like you, I’m generally well received when I do it. Except, of course, when I’m trying to review my own work and fail miserably. It’s like I know it too well and look right through the writing to the story underlying. So again, thanks so much for picking up the grammar and tense and paragraph placement and all of the other fun stuff that comes with a DeFazio “masterpiece.”

Wow, this is the most amazingly helpful evaluation (or input of any kind) I’ve ever had as a writer. I can’t quite express how thankful I am to have found your help. Your thoughts are so insightful. Every point you make has the clearest ring of truth. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.

Thank you for your excellent critique, which is far beyond my expectations, on schedule, and very, very much appreciated!!! It will take a while to digest it all, and I know already that I can learn a lot from it!

Invaluable info. Have to dissect it all now. Everything you said resonates strongly. I’m all over it. Thank you so much.

Thank you from the bottom of my heart for such a wonderful evaluation. It will challenge me to be a better writer. As you pointed out, I need more dialog and action in my story so it doesn’t slow things down. I needed guidance in how to put these things into context. You did that for me. I do respect good criticism and learn from it. I intend to use your suggestions and comments as I do a restructure of this novel. There are so many things you wrote to help my book and me. I assure you that I am grateful for each one.